There was a rustle in the staff room bush in wigram primary. It was a warm and cloudy Monday morning.
Rican came out, just in time for our experiment. We had just spent the last 5 minutes playing ball rush with the whole Toroa team. We were dispersing into two groups, the Lab/Study and the launch. The Lab and
Study sat down outside the staff room, not knowing what would happen next. Ms Thomason held a packet
of hard, mint Mentos and she came towards a chair with a Coke Zero bottle on top. She unscrewed the
lid, and Ms McCormick just came to the scene. Everyone was yelling out “Four!”,so Ms T put 4 mentos
in, and the foaming coke shot up, and reached around 10 centimetres high. The brown, light, fuzzy looking
foam hovered in the air, then spread onto the blue plastic chair beneath it. The whole class sighed, let
down by the small shot of foam in the air. Ms Thomason tried again, but that wasn’t successful at all.
Mitchell Wall yelled out “Can I please have the rest of the Coke Ms Thomason?” Mitchell got a stern
answer of “No.” The Lab and the Study had headed to the Study room, with Ms Thomason in the lead and
Ms McCormick at the back.
Rican came out, just in time for our experiment. We had just spent the last 5 minutes playing ball rush with the whole Toroa team. We were dispersing into two groups, the Lab/Study and the launch. The Lab and
Study sat down outside the staff room, not knowing what would happen next. Ms Thomason held a packet
of hard, mint Mentos and she came towards a chair with a Coke Zero bottle on top. She unscrewed the
lid, and Ms McCormick just came to the scene. Everyone was yelling out “Four!”,so Ms T put 4 mentos
in, and the foaming coke shot up, and reached around 10 centimetres high. The brown, light, fuzzy looking
foam hovered in the air, then spread onto the blue plastic chair beneath it. The whole class sighed, let
down by the small shot of foam in the air. Ms Thomason tried again, but that wasn’t successful at all.
Mitchell Wall yelled out “Can I please have the rest of the Coke Ms Thomason?” Mitchell got a stern
answer of “No.” The Lab and the Study had headed to the Study room, with Ms Thomason in the lead and
Ms McCormick at the back.
I really enjoyed this because I find it a lot easier to write Recounts then Narratives.
Hi Leo I think this is a good post with lots of adjectives but you haven't made it very clear what is going on. Next time maybe explain why your doing it a little bit more. Please check out my recount and you can tell me what to improve on.
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